Repeat a character’s name often in dialogue and in straight narrative. Don’t slip into “he” or “she” for long stretches because if you do many fast readers will find themselves having to go back to determine who is speaking or feeling or viewing the action. Punch the proper names.
Names anchor readers the way a compass anchors a hiker. Pronouns are lightweight by design, which is exactly the problem: in a scene with two women or two men, "she" and "he" force a reader to scroll backward mentally to reattach the pronoun to a body. That backward glance breaks momentum, and momentum is most of what makes prose feel alive. Consider the difference between "She grabbed the keys and she ran outside, her heart pounding" and "Maren grabbed the keys and ran outside, heart pounding." The second version costs nothing and buys clarity. The caution: naming every single sentence turns prose stiff and roboticized, like a legal document. Let pronouns carry short, unambiguous stretches, and bring the name back the moment a second character enters or the action shifts sharply.
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